hopeless
Lark Still in the Egg
don't let the butterflies blind you
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Post by hopeless on Dec 30, 2006 12:19:01 GMT -5
Too much to think about, Passion clouds my mind, The past leads me to doubt, And the logic of this realm I cannot find.
This can't be a lie, to feel so safe, I’ve lost track of time, I could float away wrapped in this warm embrace, There are so many butterflies* I'm blind.
The pressure of the present is gone, Can I let myself fall, Should I have faith in what waits beyond The vial of time and fait, can I risk it all?
I don't know, only time can tell, But time doesn't exist here outside of my shell.
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Post by Black Sakura on Jan 13, 2007 1:00:10 GMT -5
Just one little thing...the first word should be 'too'.
Other than that, it's wonderful.
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hopeless
Lark Still in the Egg
don't let the butterflies blind you
Posts: 58
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Post by hopeless on Jan 23, 2007 17:54:57 GMT -5
all better!
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Post by Black Sakura on Jan 27, 2007 2:26:46 GMT -5
Yayness. ^.^
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